Please pay attention to attached instructions carefully.
Based on the answers you provided for part 1, this was the feedback for the essay. Can you please revise the paper to fix the discrepancies?
1. Model Short Answer: H.R. 1234, “Require Marshmallows in All Hot Chocolate,” should be passed into law, because the creamy fluff of half-melted marshmallows makes hot chocolate measurably better.
Comment: The topic and your stance are clear. Do figure out how to edit out the first person voice (“I”) since the assignment asks you to only use third person.
2. Model Short Answer: An example of an MLA in-text citation and work cited entry for a journal article from an online database: “Quotation goes here” (Smith 23). Smith, Bob. “Article Investigating Stuff in Ancient Uruguay.” Journal of Stuff, vol. 34, no. 2, 15 June 2000, pp. 35-48. Database Title, doi: ###.##/xx.##
Comment: Your in-text citations are basically correct, but note that the page number parenthetical citation should go after the paraphrased information.
3. Comment: The parts of the argument that you have here look good. You’re missing one big piece for a Rogerian argument, though: the common ground. What is the ideal/concern that both sides see as important, and that you could use to bring them together?
Delivering a high-quality product at a reasonable price is not enough anymore.
That’s why we have developed 5 beneficial guarantees that will make your experience with our service enjoyable, easy, and safe.
You have to be 100% sure of the quality of your product to give a money-back guarantee. This describes us perfectly. Make sure that this guarantee is totally transparent.Read more
Each paper is composed from scratch, according to your instructions. It is then checked by our plagiarism-detection software. There is no gap where plagiarism could squeeze in.Read more
Thanks to our free revisions, there is no way for you to be unsatisfied. We will work on your paper until you are completely happy with the result.Read more
Your email is safe, as we store it according to international data protection rules. Your bank details are secure, as we use only reliable payment systems.Read more
By sending us your money, you buy the service we provide. Check out our terms and conditions if you prefer business talks to be laid out in official language.Read more